In article <464d98cf$0$19228$fa0fcedb@[EMAIL PROTECTED]
>, Blue Sow
<janet.read@[EMAIL PROTECTED]
> wrote:
> This was my first attempt at the form.
> My primary objective was to observe 'the rules'.
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> Captain Spoon looked out.
> She saw the snow on the ground
> and she turned away.
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> Perhaps someone would like to post a 'better' example.
http://www.hsa-haiku.org/HSA_Definitions_2004.html
Definition: A haiku is a short poem that uses imagistic language to
convey the essence of an experience of nature or the season intuitively
linked to the human condition.
Notes: Most haiku in English consist of three unrhymed lines of
seventeen or fewer syllables, with the middle line longest, though
today's poets use a variety of line lengths and arrangements. In
Japanese a typical haiku has seventeen "sounds" (on) arranged five,
seven, and five. (Some translators of Japanese poetry have noted that
about twelve syllables in English approximates the duration of
seventeen Japanese on.) Traditional Japanese haiku include a "season
word" (kigo), a word or phrase that helps identify the season of the
experience recorded in the poem, and a "cutting word" (kireji), a sort
of spoken punctuation that marks a pause or gives emphasis to one part
of the poem. In English, season words are sometimes omitted, but the
original focus on experience captured in clear images continues. The
most common technique is juxtaposing two images or ideas (Japanese
rensô). Punctuation, space, a line-break, or a grammatical break may
substitute for a cutting word. Most haiku have no titles, and metaphors
and similes are commonly avoided. (Haiku do sometimes have brief
prefatory notes, usually specifying the setting or similar facts;
metaphors and similes in the simple sense of these terms do sometimes
occur, but not frequently. A discussion of what might be called "deep
metaphor" or symbolism in haiku is beyond the range of a definition.
Various kinds of "pseudohaiku" have also arisen in recent years; see
the Notes to "senryu", below, for a brief discussion.)
Afternoon in autumn
Winding lifting leaves, one floats free
Spirit tells this is a special life
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