On Feb 18, 7:39=A0am, LiterArty <gmcart...@[EMAIL PROTECTED]
> wrote:
> Thoughts / comments welcomed on the following. Begun last summer but,
> as yet, unfinished.
>
> Copyright protected 2007 Gary McArthur writing as Mark Arthur.
>
First impressions: as yet unstarted.
So I got to where you broke off and am thinking: "...and?"
There's enough there to anchor various details on later if
you so choose, yes, but otherwise a neat demonstration of
how to give next to nothing away in two paperback-sized
pages so far as I can tell.
For a coffee-table magazine filler it is taking too long to get
going, speaking as one who has never edited stories for that
format. With inclusion in an anthology in mind, of maybe
10-20 pages in length, it seem a waste of goodwill to post
it at all when a few more paragraphs would give some idea
of where it's going without hinting too much at where it may
end up. The basic premise isn't bad, and is no way one I'd
have considered starting from myself.
So yeah: they're either pensioners, lottery winners or it's
Saturday morning, there's a fa****onably observant hint of
Asperger's in hubby, and a sense of Prozac-cu****oned
numbness in wifey maybe, if there really is someone somewhere
being held captive, but, otherwise...
"...and?"
Not compelling evidence you would judiciously excerpt the
work you're seeking to promote on behalf of others effectively.
G DAEB
COPYRIGHT (C) 2008 SIPSTON
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