John of Aix wrote:
> sprocket wrote:
>> dreaminggirl wrote:
>>> I am a Chinese graduate student. The following is part of my
>>> master's thesis. Who can help me polish my language. Thank you very
>>> much. William Somerset Maugham (1874--1965), born in Paris, is one of
>>> the
>>> most popular writers in British literature. He has created
>>
>> "He wrote"... you would only use "he has written" if you were
>> expecting him to write more.
>>
>>> about 20
>>> novels, more than 100 short stories, 32 plays as well as lots of
>>> memoirs, travel essays, comments etc., all his life.
>>
>> "During his life"... which is of course a bit redundant, as few
>> writers write after death, so leave it out. Or recast the whole
>> sentence to something like "During his career he wrote"...
>>
>> "Lots of" and "what's more" are rather informal.
>>
>>> Maugham has shown
>>
>> "showed"
>
> No, 'shown'
He meant "Maugham showed" rather than "Maugham has shown". This is
supposed
to be a simple narrative, don't forget.
--
John Briggs
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